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My #1 need for critique are the "Reactions During Testing" sections of the test logs. I feel like they aren't very clinical/professional sounding. Otherwise, just tell me what you think of the idea, tracks that you feel would benefit the article by being tested on, or just stupid mistakes I missed. Thanks! (First tab of the sandbox page)

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This sounds interesting, I like the idea of having the hallucinations based of famous song lyrics. There are few songs that could be very interesting to see test logs of.

As it is right now however it is lacking a hook, you hallucinate while listening to music, so what? Is there a reason for this SCP to shows song lyrics? Where was it found?

Some other things to look out for:

I've made a pretty big change to the article by explaining other forms of audio played through the earbuds and gave it a bit of an origin. This SCP draft is now a product from THE FACTORY. Tell me any stupid mistakes I missed and what I can do to just improve the draft overall. I'd like to try to post it on the mainlist soon. Thanks! Link to my sandbox: http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/captain-raptin
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