secure garage-like room in Site-█
'Secure garage in Site-X' is perfectly fine. There's a few vehicle SCP objects that would require The Foundation to have secure garages.
The room is precisely 14 ft. long and 12 ft. wide, with the ceiling coming to 10ft. high.
The Foundation uses metric measurements, rather than imperial. That means metres, in this case. I would hesitantly add that the size of the actual van is more important than the size of the room where it is kept, but that's a minor point. It's generally not seen as needed to describe the measurements of the room unless it's necessary for securing the SCP object.
standard clamp on its right wheel […] without a Level 3 clearance from accessing the subject.
Doesn't the clamp just not allow people to drive the vehicle? In my experience of clamped vehicles, you can still get in and out - you can still 'access' it.
SCP-XXXX as of █/█/██09 has been entirely stripped of all four of its wheels and has had the inner workings of its engine intentionally sabotaged as to completely remove all possibility of any movement
Doesn't that mean the 'clamp' detail is out of date and doesn't need to be included?
SCP-XXXX has been restricted from any personnel in the facility, Level 4 clearance or otherwise,
Small but important error - you said Level 3 a couple of sentences ago, now you said Level 4.
what was rather peculiar about the claims (and the reason it was brought to the foundations attention) was the fact those of the female sex weren’t the only ones affected, they were in actuality the minority in these particular circumstances.
This is a bit too casual and clumsy in terms of clinical tone, but also seems a bit of a casual lead-up to such a major discovery. I'd recommend changing the wording and also not jumping the gun quite so swiftly in the biggest part of this article.
with a recorded 80% of all victims being masculine- identifying individuals.
To me, this is a particularly interesting note - does that mean if a FTM trans* person was affected by the van, they'd be within the 80%? It's a small thing, but it may be an interesting point to develop upon, should you go into any sort of Test Logs.
the foundation
'The Foundation'.
SCP-XXXX- A
You need to note what SCP-XXXX-A is before now. We can assume from what you've written, but there needs to be a more formalised introduction of 'subjects affected by SCP-XXXX are referred to as SCP-XXXX-A'. You may also want to have A for female-affected subjects, and B for male-affected subjects, as the outcomes are hugely different.
However, with biological male victims, they are in need of a caesarean-section in order to complete the birth
Think about the real life implications of this. As disturbing as the process may be - you never really go into how this happens, which I think you do need to do - it could totally change the landscape of childbirth. There would be potential things for the Ethics Committee to think about, like how they may theoretically use this object to grant gay couples babies, or for trans* people who could never carry a child. It doesn't mean they'd do those things, but there are sitting on a huge, life-changing concept, and I think that would at least warrant a discussion and it may open up your article further from being just a 'thing that does a thing'.
[Incident -A████]
I don't really understand why this incident is expunged. It comes across less like 'The Foundation did it for security reasons' and more like 'the author couldn't think what to put here'. So I'd say do more research on the topic, and think about including it. Again, it could open up your article further.
all life processes in the child decease
Somewhere, you should include that 'devices such as ultrasounds and dopplers have been used and have shown development consistent with a normal pregnancy'. We, as an audience, don't know if this pregnancy can be recorded with normal objects, and The Foundation would be the first to test this, as they also don't know.
