Okay, uh… this is… kind of your standard stats-dump generic monster kind of approach, which we admittedly see a couple times a week.
I recommend reading over this guide on interesting expungment for some tips on writing interesting expungment. Also, if you're really set on writing this as a humanoid, then first take a look at the humanoid writing guide if you haven't yet.
I recommend getting the base idea polished up in the Ideas and Brainstorming forum before you try fixing the draft. Go to that forum, post a quick summary of the concept you want to write up (don't link the draft unless someone asks), and reviewers there can help you make the idea more interesting and give you some advice on structuring the eventual article for smoothness of reading and narrative. At present, it's a bit too predictable on the violence/containment breaches/body count to really stand out much.