What do ya think?
Hi Dr. Bear,
I've been ruminating over this for a while. I think that the general tone and concept are good, but it's not quite there for me, and I've been struggling to figure out what that was. I think that what's missing is the Foundation's attempts to discover a mechanism that causes SCP-XXXX-1 to function as it does. They don't have to find the answer, per se, but some clues could deepen the story and make it part of a larger mythos. As it is, it's just one of those things that happens.
Don't know if this helps, but that's my 2 cents. At the very least it bumps you back to the top.