"As Water is Corrupted..."
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"As Water is Corrupted..."
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Summary:
"...Unless it Moves."
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It's kinda interesting. Test logs might make it better, as well as some experiments with trying to purify the water. Overall it's pretty good. There's spelling mistakes here and there, but a quick proofread out loud will help you find anything you think is worded poorly.
Space is a whole lot of stuff and a whole lot of not-stuff — charles sagen
Shadow9771, please try and offer constructive feedback.
Test logs might make it better
Test logs and adding length generally won't rescue an average or poor idea, for example. You should only suggest this sort of thing if there's an actual narrative point, not just to add length or follow some format.
Overall it's pretty good.
What's 'pretty good' about it?
There's spelling mistakes here and there
Where? Examples.
a quick proofread out loud
Reading the text outloud won't help the author identify spelling mistakes, and it may also not help them identify grammar and punctuation mistakes, depending on how the person reads. That's part of the reason you're here to give feedback - to tell the author where these mistakes are and how to fix them.
Here's a brief guide to the rules of giving critique, but one of the best ways to learn is watch more experienced people give their own feedback, and read plenty of good articles to identify what is good about them.
I'm working on a full review. I should've waited to post the whole thing all at once, but sometimes a little bit of impetus can help an author find their mistakes.
Space is a whole lot of stuff and a whole lot of not-stuff — charles sagen
Yes, but this sort of feedback doesn't help. Rather than rushing it and therefore giving out poor feedback that is in no way constructive, don't post until you are more ready to write in-depth.
Yeah it was stupid of me. My apologies.
Space is a whole lot of stuff and a whole lot of not-stuff — charles sagen
Hi author,
Please try and stick to the 'one board per draft' rule.
You already have a board with (some) feedback here, and following this rule reduces spam, and also keeps all your feedback in one place which makes it easier for both reviewers and yourself.
Here's the link to your original board - http://www.scp-wiki.net/forum/t-2245825/as-water-is-corrupted
alright.
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