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If you read the last draft, the major changes here are to Anomaly Type 4 (it now exudes carbon monoxide rather than catching on fire) and the addition of "The Buchenwald Hypothesis", which explains a possibility for the item's WWII use.

I really enjoyed this skip and it's relations to ww2, the holocaust, and the insurgency. My main criticisms would be a number of minor grammar errors (the last sentence of the first addendum for example), the overly long title for the containment history section, and the existence of the buchenwald hypothesis addendum. The latter is just an exposition dump, whose contents can be inferred already by any attentive reader. Ending the article on the instructions about finding insurgencey art is a much better end.

It's also never explained why exactly people exploring anomaly 3 are dosed with toxins? That seemed to come out of nowhere. Finally, instead of using anomaly type 1, 2, etc. you may want to use the more standard sub naming system if SCP-xxxx-A, -B, etc.

Hi author.

I'm noting that, even though you have received additional feedback here, the rule is 'one draft, one board'. You already have a board about this draft. Please look at the Draft Forum Guidelines where it states that the rule is one draft, one board. This helps reduce spam, and keeps things fair for all users.

If you're finding it hard to get secondary feedback, you can use the IRC chat or PM a member of staff. Please don't make additional boards about the same draft, as this results in spam and will also result in your board being locked.

Original board is here, where I would encourage anymore feedback to go.