CZF-26 must be insulated from all seismic activities.
I believe it should be "seismic activity," since the only one people are usually referring to is the whole earthquake thing.
and at no times should damage be inflicted to SCP-xxxx.
I feel like not needlessly damaging anomalies is kind of a given? This just seems broad enough that it doesn't need to be said.
Members of Mobile Task Force Psi-26 ("Limited Edition") are embedded in stores where action figures are sold to identify any new instances.
That seems like… a lot of stores. You don't specify a region, so worldwide that's got to be tens of thousands of stores that have an agent who just looks over action figures all day. I'd recommend narrowing the scope a bit.
Tracking down and capturing PoI-F2L6D is of Red Priority
Tracking down feels a bit informal to me. Maybe "locating" instead?
An instance of SCP-xxxx was found by Agent █████████ █████ who bought the instance as a gift for his son and discovered the anomalous effects.
It's hard to tell since the name is censored, but is this saying (along with the list in addendum B) that he just so happened to acquire the doll that corresponds to him? That also seems incredibly unlikely, unless I'm missing something big here (if I am, you might have hidden it too well.)
[BEGIN LOG]
I don't think this log really adds anything to the story. It's not long enough to get into the character's head, and nothing of interest really happens aside from the couple lines involving the duck? I finished the log with a very distinct feeling of "okay?" which probably isn't what you were going for.
The rescue team arrived shortly after the log ended at the residence of ███████ ███ █████, located in ████████, █████████████, ██████. It is currently unknown if Mr. ███████ was PoI-F2L6D, as records show him to be missing for █ years at the time of writing.
There's a lot of black boxing here that doesn't seem to serve any purpose. I found distracting, and the information doesn't seem sensitive enough to justify its use. The extent of it stands out at this point in the article, but I would say the same about the use throughout the rest of the draft.
On ██/██/20██, Agent ███ spontaneously splits in half vertically and expires immediately, presumably under the effects of an SCP-xxxx instance.
This ending feels like it's playing the concept too straight. This was what I expected to happen, and the event wasn't presented in a particularly notable way. I feel like you need to subvert expectations a bit more here.
