This is good. You're making it pretty vague, maybe a bit too much, but I like it.
Date: 17 Sep 2010 01:13
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There's a few issues I had with the tone here and there- "Its color has faded over time, and was once a much richer shade of blue," isn't exactly the precise clinical wording the Foundation would use- but I had a good creepy moment when I realized that the things were real.
Also, the doctor/d-class interaction made me smile.
The use of "shall" in the Containment Procedures felt off, too.
But a shirt that makes nostalgia-loving 20somethings see creepy things watching them? Hell, yes. And I say that as a nostalgia-loving 20something. I've always been weary of shirts from Goodwill. Very cool to have that idea played with.
Once I'm done posting this, I'm going to be changing the 'SCP-362 shall be contained…' into 'SCP-362 is to be contained…', if that's alright.
On to the item itself, what would happen if you give the D-class a knife and told him to chuck it at one of the dudes? Would they move out of the way or would they get speared? How would they react to having a knife thrown at them?
What happens if they put the shirt back on after the 'ghosts' appear?
Also, and this is driving me nuts, what show is it? My first thought was 'Gummi Bears' then 'The real Ghostbusters'.
You know what, don't answer that. The mystery is a delight in itself. +1
After reading the bit about the Geiger counter, I thought of Star Trek. But then I remembered it was a 80's-90's cartoon. The Geiger counter bit definitely smacks of "The Real Ghostbusters".
The article is very clear that nothing resembling the "shadow people" phenomenon actually appeared in the cartoon in question, though!
What, you never watched REDACTED when you were a kid? I'd watch it to the exclusion of all else.
On the SA thread, he reveals the identity of the cartoon. Don't read the SA thread unless you really want to know… and honestly, it kind of spoils the mystique a little to know that it's [REDACTED] and not [REDACTED], [REDACTED] or [REDACTED].
Still upvoted, though. Fabulous concept.
Thanks for comments.
I definitely agree about the tone, and will be changing the bit about the "richer shade of blue" upon next revision. The construction "is to be [verb]" sounds wordy and clunky to me, but if it brings it in line with other articles I'm okay with it. (Would "must be [verb]" be acceptable?)
I like these experimentation ideas. I don't know what would happen if you threw a knife at one of the figures, to be honest. With regards to putting the shirt back on, I think the test subject would exhibit aversion to wearing the shirt, similar to the discomfort they experience when prompted to talk about the show afterwards. A subject forced to wear the shirt might experience PTSD, or at least a panic attack. If it's common practice for others to write experiment logs for other articles, I wouldn't mind you all adding to this article. I'll write a log or two in the next couple of days myself, using your ideas if they haven't already been written up by that time.
As far as the identity of the show: Yeah, it's best to leave it up to the reader, I think — though I did have a specific cartoon in mind when I wrote it. I have to say that the Gummi Bears guess made me chuckle. I can't imagine a less malevolent cartoon.
Glad you all seemed to like the interview. Dialogue's my favorite thing to write.
Can someone explain to me why this is a T-shirt with an old kids' show on it? Seems kind of an arbitrary choice.
Explaining things generally makes them less compelling instead of more compelling, but I'll give it a shot anyway. The reason it's a Saturday morning cartoon is because pretty much everyone has some good memories about Saturday morning cartoons. There's nothing quite like subverting a sunny memory to unnerve people.
They're also the kind of T-shirts that crop up a lot in thrift stores, and though I never touched on this in the entry I think there's something oddly haunting or eerie about wearing a stranger's old clothes — as if you're never quite alone when you're wearing them.
One of the better experiment logs that I'd read, and the 31 days thing was especially well done. It gives a feeling that the shirt, if worn enough would merge two realities or something like that. And I'm curious about what happens if someone puts the shirt back on during the manifestations as well.
The last part bugged me though. The section of discovered data read like a Monty Python sketch to me. The Holy Hand Grenade of Antioch to be specific.
Really? I loved that last bit. It upped the mystery of it enough that I clicked upvote again not remembering I'd already upvoted.
It's not that I think it should be removed. I like it for what it is, but I feel that the tone of it seems out of place. The constant repetition with rearranging the order of the words coupled with the oddly exact and seemingly randomly chosen numbers falls, at least for me, in between silly and prank. As though the people that put the data there were doing so to mess with the foundation.
I do like the allusion that whatever the shadow creatures are, or their world assuming that it was the missing D class responsible for the data, they have a cultural need for data, to a point that the data and numbers are like music. Considering that the foundation is data it stands that they would be very curious about the large collection of "songs".
Maybe I'm off on the interpretation of what it means, but I still feel that the style of writing seems like the beings are just messing with the foundation. That or they think cyclically to a point of sillyness.
I still like the article as a whole, enough to upvote it and bookmark it for future reading, and give the author applause on the rest of the article.