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I spent FOUR months on this thing and I am still very uncertain about its quality but life is too short and I have other content backed up behind it, so, here. [chucks it messily on the table, walks away in a huff]

I'm so bad at writing characters. I find it so hard to write in anybody's voice other than my own. The other problem is when the characters want the conversation to go in a different direction from what I wanted. I have stuff to cover, you idiots! I had all this great conflict dialogue written for you!

Mnugh.

Edit:

This Tale takes place chronologically somewhere between We Need To Talk About Fifty-Five and CASE COLOURLESS GREEN.

This is painfully tragic and I love it. The details on the Antimemetics Div and other Foundation working are cool, and this also a good lead in for what'll be happening in Five⁵ as well.

+1

Oh, I know some good mood music for this.

This is great. You say you don't like writing characters, but there's so many small moments that catch me here- for some reason, I got emotional on Gauss telling Marion that Adam's "the one." +1

I'm left at the end feeling like I'm missing a very important detail, but the journey to get there is worth an upvote regardless.

Fucking great tale, dude.

*sips heart hurting juice*

OOF OUCH OWIE +1

I'm so bad at writing characters.

If this is your bad, I'm excited to see your good. +1.

This is great, I watched it for four months as it got developed on your sandbox and it just got better and better, don't worry.

As someone who's been happily married for over twenty years, I found this utterly, viscerally terrifying. Well done.

Dang. Burning the bridge of alike thought.

I'm guessing that this occurs before the final iteration of Marion's rediscovery of The Biggin?

I think I see what you're concerned about in terms of character voice, qntm, but I don't think you need to worry about this tale. The emotional stakes are palpably high throughout, and you have a great knack for cold opens before getting into the plot. This more than fits with the august company of the rest of the series.