Any Foundation employee involved with an anomaly relating to quantum mechanics is not to form a relationship with SCP-XXXX-1, and class-A ammestics are to be administered as soon as possible.
I'm not sure why, but this sentence read weirdly to me. I think it's the "as soon as possible". It feels a bit too casual and the sentence doesn't flow well with it. That makes it feel a bit bloated.
As I was typing this out, I realized why this sentence felt off with me. The second part of the sentence doesn't logically flow with the first part. It feels like there is a step missing between the first part, barring relationships between the SCP and certain staff, and the amnestics. And because that little bit is missing, it makes it sound like all staff dealing with quantum stuff has to be amnesticized, whether they've dealt with -1 or not.
I'm just going to assume that the second half of the sentence was referring to if the person did form a relationship with -1. Since that's not stated the sentence doesn't flow well.
In order to prevent a containment breach, SCP-XXXX-1 must be fed two times a day. Any cracks in SCP-XXXX-1's containment chamber are to be sealed in order to prevent a possible containment breach by SCP-XXXX-1.
I feel like these two sentence could be combined.
Given SCP-XXXX-1's nature, no medical treatment is required
Who doesn't need medical treatment? I'm assuming it's -1, but that's not super clear.
Given SCP-XXXX-1's nature, no medical treatment is required; although food is to be given once a shift is completed
This sentence doesn't make much sense. It starts by talking about medical treatment, then switches to intervals in which it's given food after the semicolon. I don't know why it switches like that and it grinds my reading to a hard stop. A big thing to me, while writing SCPs and reading them is the flow of reading. If I have to stop or slow down my reading to re-read something, I think that negatively impacts the work.
Any containment shifts are to be conducted by staff occupying the following positions:
I feel "any" should be "all"
1. Two or more physicist specializing in quantum mechanics.
"Physicist" should be plural.
6. Two or more physicist specializing in particle physics.
See above.
class-A amnestics are optional depending on risk.
Risk of what?
The Q.N.L.P.C device
I have no idea what this is, or what it does. The text doesn't provide any context clues, and it never appears again in the rest of the text. What was the point of this? It feels like it's just weighing down the text. Making it longer than it needs to be.
The Q.N.L.P.C device is to be active at all times, with power directly linked to Site 45's 500 kW fission reactor, and is to be manned by a team of physics PhDs specializing in particle physics and/or quantum mechanics.
This is a runon sentence. I also want to point out the part of the sentence about the team that staffs this. Right now, this thing is literally run on doctorates. Pieces of paper. I'm pretty sure that was just a typo, but I wanted to bring it up.
SCP-XXXX is a phenomenon relating to an anomalous breed of the domestic cat, hence forth referred to as SCP-XXXX-1.
Two minor notes here. First, I would drop the "the" before "domestic cat". Reads weirdly. Secondly, henceforth is one word.
SCP-XXXX-1 is an anomalous specimen of domestic cat, resembling an overweight elderly specimen of the domestic shorthair breed.
This sentence says pretty much the exact same thing as the sentence above it. Is there any way to combine the information? It's also confusing, as in the previous sentence, the entire breed was -1. And in this sentence it's just a single specimen.
By the time in which this iteration of the SCP-XXXX-1 article was written, SCP-XXXX-1 is approx. twelve years old.
I don't know what this means, in context of the article. Do they write a new article every time they have a new -1? Is -1 the entire breed? I'm confused.
Also, I don't think the word "approximately" needs to be shortened in the description.
See bellow
*below
Due to the anomalous physiology of SCP-XXXX-1 (See bellow), SCP-XXXX-1 is considered to be genderless.
The repetition of SCP-xxxx-1 within two words of each other reads badly. I'd suggest changing one of them.
The subject possesses bodily features not found in non-anomalous versions of the domestic cat.
I think it would be better to say that it lacks certain body parts, then mention that it has bodily features not present in normal specimens.
The opening caused by the umbilical cord detaching from the fetus.
I feel like it's not necessary to define what a navel is, as it has a clearly defined definition out of universe. A lot of people already know what one is, and the person in-universe reading it would also most likely already know.
After assuming the position of its prey
Is the "prey" the object it replaced?
SCP-XXXX-1 will absorb a certain percentage of its prey's mass
Do we know what this percentage is?