This is probably too similar to SCP-545, but I tried making it different. If anyone has the time to give me a critique on how to make this better, I would be quite appreciative of it. Any suggestions on how to trim it down if needed, make it more unique, etc.?
Might need to fix it up a bit.. Some parts seem a bit iffy. Try using the chats and getting some of the others to help you clean it up a bit. But I actually like it.
276: …She said, "Daddy, why did you do that to me? Why did you [DATA EXPUNGED]?". I…I didn't even noticed how much she looked like my fourth daughter up until that moment…
I'd upvote it.
Edit: Try REDACTED instead of EXPUNGED.
Yeah, there are some stylistic/tonal things that could use fixing, but I'm gonna need chat help for that. Perhaps the SCP itself needs a little polishing, too. I'll run it by the chat some time. I changed the EXPUNGED to a REDACTED.
So it seems my concept is fairly solid, what I really need is help organizing the article and making it more coherent. If it still doesn't stand, then I'll rework the concept itself. Anyone able to help me shape my writing into something more comprehensible?
It's interesting, but what exactly is the anomalous item here? Is it the actual town, just the people, or the specific process that they do to reverse aging?
Other than this minor confusion, it's definitely a solid article.
At first I designated the town the SCP, but then I thought it would make more sense to make the people and the reverse aging the components of the SCP. Come to think of it, the town itself is pretty mysterious…should it be designated as a component of the SCP as well?