Those pictures are fucking excellent, especially second one.
I'd perhaps put in what exactly it tends to require for service and/or experiment log. Other than that, kewl.
About what exactly SCP-XVX requires for service… I'm thinking of redacting it to increase the 'scary' factor. Let's just say that the reward usually requires a female to be involved.
Thanks for the comment anyway.
Then make it follow somehow. Go look in other articles on how to make redactions that add to the article.
Okay, I've reworked it somewhat and added an experiment and interview log.
Please tell me what you think.
The experiment is good, except that botulin kills faster than any infection.
As for the interview, his description of the process, with too much cut out, and then "horrifying, isn't it" sounds almost like a joke. I dunno, think it'd be able to do without an interview at all. Alternately, cut out just one crucial thing to the procedure, and write the rest. Then you won't need the cheese.
Also, a) as Photo said, we'd contain the guy, and b) I doubt that he'd surrender the knowledge voluntarily. If he would, then he'd be surprise like "why it's so important, every shaman knows this" .
It looks promising, but keep it consistently in the present tense instead of switching every so often.
Also, the fact that there are three of them should probably be in the first paragraph of the description.
I went through again and edited for tense and grammar, but left the concepts, etc., intact. A few comments on your recent edits:
First and foremost, if Mr. Kukuh knows how to make a friggin' SCP there's no way he'd be left to run free. The Foundation would immediately capture him and acquire (by any means necessary) all his knowledge on SCP-XVX; once it had finished that, it would either terminate him, keep him in custody for further interrogation/consulting, or give him a Class-A amnesiac before releasing him.
Second, keeping the Indonesian and the English side-by-side makes the interview a bit clunky. These briefings are supposedly prepared for an English-language audience; unless there's some crucial element of the text that would be lost in translation, I don't see the need to keep the original interview. *apologetic shrug*
Third, you've done a much better job of implying horrifying things behind the redaction. Thumbs up, and augh!
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So what should I do about Mr. Kukuh and his gang? According to him, there are others makers of SCP-XVX.
I've come up with some organization called FPI (Front Perlindungan Indonesia [literally Indonesia's Protection Front]) that swoops in and detained the shamans before the foundation come in. I don't know if it's a good explanation though.
I like what you have done with it now - the interview and ritual feel much more real (i like how the shaman doesn't make much of it - for him it's as common knowledge as anything else - noone told him it breaks physical law XD )
I'd run it past the chat to polish it off, but in the current form,. i'd upvote it.
Thank you for your input. The article is now in the last stage of proofreading and I would think that it would be posted on the SCP main site very soon (If there's still vacancy that is).
Thank you for the time you set aside to read my article and for your input, both are greatly appreciated. I might seek your advice and guidance again for future article.
My sincere thanks, as well as best wish and regard