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Date: 01 Nov 2011 22:54
Number of posts: 16
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While the writing is not bad, the whole idea of this series of tales (The ones similar to it) rub me wrong.
I can't quite place my finger on why. Maybe it's the in medias res style, and I never quite grasp what's going on, but it doesn't hook me in.
Just my two foundation issue credits =/
in medias res style
WARNING: NITPICK AHEAD
"In media res" is a narrative technique, not a writing style. :P Just sayin'.
I quite like this. The previous installment I was somewhat ambivalent about, but this is good. There's a little of Jasper Fforde in there, but without the whimsy that can sometimes overpower JF's stories.
Nitpick/Question: Percival/Percy. The method of indicating speech by the character shifts in formality half-way through the card game - "Percival said", "Percival said", "Percy sighed". Given the context in play, wouldn't it have a better consistency to have all the referential stuff informally, until (at least) the more formal greeting between Midnight and Percival?
Hm, I appear to not expressed myself clearly.
The first two times in the card game where Percival speaks, you're indicating it by using his full name (Percival) , and for the rest of the time, you're using the shortened form (Percy) informal name. Why the switch?
I'm not a fan of bringing SH canon onto the wiki proper.
Your choice, of course, but it's a Tale, not an article. The cameos, aside from Midnight, were done out of a sense of fun and a bit of a wink. And we do share a 'Verse, after all.
There's also another tale behind the reasons for that, but I'll let Clef tell the story his way before I say any more. I'm really liking this.
I loved this. I'm not sure it's actually the best thing I've ever read on the wiki (in fact, I'm pretty sure it's not), but I enjoyed it as much as the best things I've read on the wiki, which is what counts.
Also, my opinion might be influenced by my love of the Serpent's Hand combined with a lack of knowledge of the RP that (I'm told) fleshed it out (I've read everything posted on the Wanderer's Library, but there's probably a bajillion pieces missing there), but I loved the inclusion of the Library.
Also also, Midnight is a great character. And the side characters were entertaining to watch as well. (And hey! A yeti-woman!)
Midnight and I thank you. And ideally, you shouldn't have to recognize the characters to enjoy the story. The difference between a cameo and a crutch should be readily apparent.
Midnight's an old character of mine (technically an NPC when I started with her many moons ago) that I re-purposed for the Library. Not the same, but they had different story arcs. I do like her and her feline ways. Trying to think and act like a housecat is one of those things that stretches the mind.