I put my two cents in in chat. I lieks it.
I don't know why the idea of bleeding blue is creepy to me. But it got you an upvote.
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This idea popped into my head as I was walking home from school a few weeks ago. I hope I've provided sufficient clues to give you a general idea of what's going on.
Eh, it doesn't catch me in any visceral sort of way.
Do either of them wear clothes?
Also, for 1646-2, I suggest not using the term "individuals" — use "specimens" instead. Hell, the impression I get is that these are NOT individuals anyway, being almost always genetically identical and not corresponding to any missing people
I'm going to guess that 1646-1 wears clothes, although I'm not sure how to state that. "SCP-1646-1 is typically seen wearing clothing" sounds a bit weird.
Good call on the specimens thing. I'll do that.
And as for whether they're individuals, the answer is "sort of". It's one individual, lots of times over.
Maybe explain that he has one outfit with corresponding damage, or note any changes of clothing…
I asked because I just can't imagine either of them wearing anything significant for some reason. Personally in my head I see the guy wearing nothing but a ratty pair of jeans and being totally emaciated as he shuffles around. They strike me as both being a bit ghoulish in appearance, wearing scraps if anything.
I personally assumed that he'd wear whatever was appropriate for wherever he was, so I just put in that sometimes he wore normal things and sometimes he didn't.
You are now thinking of Bruce Li's "The One".
I don't get it.
It occurs to me that perhaps this guy should not be speaking English. Or not only English, maybe. Estonian, maybe, or Xhosa, and occasionally Khmer.
Hm… I like the idea. I'll give him a line of French, maybe.
I love this thing. I really do.
Thanks! I hate to sound self-indulgent, but why do you love it? I mainly want to know because I haven't gotten such a positive response on this one from anyone else, and I want to know what I'm doing right, so I can keep doing that.
It's just so… subtle. All the evidence is there, but you don't outright state what it is. I love that kind of thing, where the reader has to put the pieces together himself. Like the bus, and the ancient containment site.
For the slow of mind among us, could somebody spell it right out?
That said, I know good writing when I see it, so +1'd.
I was hoping to avoid that because it kinda takes some of the fun out of it for me… but I'll consider it. Might edit this post later tonight with a (spoilered) explanation.
EDIT: My explanation, feel free to come up with your own.
Probably not as cool as y'all were hoping for, but it's what I got.
I'm replying here so that I'll see the post.
I don't get it either, but that doesn't keep me from having enjoyed this. I can only guess it will be more amazing once it's explained.
I'll admit that it's more than a bit obtuse, and that wasn't quite my intention when I wrote it. Looking back, though, I can't say I'm displeased with the end result.
It may be late, but if it makes you feel any better, I got the "transient" nature of the victim right off. I mean, it was ambiguous, but it was one of the possible explanations I had. The rest of the stuff about motivations and deals however is pretty much hinted at nowhere in the text. I thought he was a Native American monstrosity that had been born that way.
A well done SCP, but honestly, forever? Even the most angry of angry dudes I think, should realize that eventually they're going to get tired of killing her over and over.
One who was simply angry might realize that upon careful consideration… thing is, serial killers have a strong tendency to be not right in the head. Killing could very well have been more or less a compulsion for him.
Or possibly he's just naturally a shortsighted, spiteful man. Or some combination of the two.
I have to say I love it too and I don't get it either. What does it for me is the lack of explanation and the general WTF-factor. That's hard to pull off without it being an annoyance. I'd love an spoiler of course, that won't diminish my enjoyment of this article, but I'd be very happy if this were never explained.