I have written an SCP. I would like you (plural) to critique it.
It is SCP-1546. Shoot away.
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One person in the chat said that the University part seemed tacked on, and that this would be better as a Wondertainment item by itself. I wrote it in part to indicate that people other than the Foundation were getting ahold of University technology, but if it seems better without it, I can leave it off. Anybody wanna chime in?
Hmm maybe Wondertainment and The University are rivals?
Wondertainment and the University don't even inhabit the same universe. I find a rivalry hard to swallow under those conditions.
I agree, by the way, that the connection feels tacked-on. I'm not sure how it could be salvaged. An instance of GOI-GOI interactions could make a great Tale, but it'd take considerable work (and considerable delicacy) to pull it off as an SCP.
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So if the University part were taken away, would it make a decent Wondertainment item? If not, I'm in the process of making an event log for minor University-related things that happen that don't warrant an actual SCP but that flesh out the plot a bit. In fact, if the Wondertainment part works for this, could I post it without the University connection here and mention the University connection on the event log? Or would that be cheating?
Personally, I like it as it is. I see it less as some sort of rivalry between the two and more that Dr. Wondertainment has taken to trapping SCP-877 instances and "borrowing" their chips to modify them for his product. I wouldn't be surprised if the caps are more or less one-off items so far, but he's released them into the wild so that he can gather data. They might not even work quite the same based on the one girl who was "tired of the lies" (I'm reminded of a short story involving a girl receiving a ring that let her hear the thoughts of others but, depending on how you chose to interpret the story, either showed that everyone thought she was a horrible person or only relayed their negative thoughts).
So that's two against having the University here, and one for. Does anybody just think this is flat out unsalvageable, or have other concerns?
EDIT: Alternately, do you think it would be too short if I cut the University stuff out? That's my primary concern.
And now for something completely different: I actually feel like it'd be better as a strictly University item instead of Wondertainment. I think it's because while the University seems to be more about brain manipulation, Wondertainment seems to be about whimsy taken to horrifying extremes. For me, this just doesn't feel like Wondertainment.
Okay, homies. At the advice of Lasergoose and others, I've made an alternate version that's a University item alone. If it looks intolerable, I can remodify it to be a Wondertainment item, or scrap it. What're your cups of tea?
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