This is it. I would reeeally like some critique. What works well? What doesn't? Is it cliched? Any and all help is appreciated!
(I distracted myself by noting that someone put the wiki toolbar on the sandbox.)
I think the "flavor" is off for the current stew that is the Foundation. By that I mean there's nothing wrong it's just not the macabre that is the current standard. It's weird and strange and should not be in the general public, but even the Safe things that are coming through are getting more dangerous.
This is something they'd break out at picnics and find someone who is musically inclined to play. (Well, OTHER then DrClef…)
I find it to be more Warehouse 13 then Foundation.
Eh… it's a magic item. Makes me think of a Futurama episode.
When you do something like this you have to really twist it and inject some tragedy. SCP items are flaws in the universe. They should have jagged edges that tear anything which comes close.
As a classically trained violinist, I really want one. In terms of SCP tone, that's not a good thing. >_> It lacks that edge of the macabre. Now, that's not to say that it needs to be more dangerous, just weirder.
You could, for instance, delve a little deeper into the effects of certain music. Peer Gynt, sure. Rondo Capriccioso, sure. The results of certain arias from Don Giovanni could be pretty, er, adult. But what happens when you break out the "Rite of Spring"? That one caused a riot at its premiere in real life.
And what if the violin itself has a certain taste in music? Try playing Handel, for instance, and the resultant phantasms are singularly unpleasant — the instrument's trying to get you to cut the boring Baroque crap and play something with a little life to it. Or maybe it's more modern music that it doesn't like: the "Afternoon of a Faun" provokes a display that's positively nauseating, or even outright insulting… and God help you if you try transcribing Britney Spears tunes.
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This is really helpful. Thanks. I was trying to avoid the "want want want" factor. The weirdness is what I was trying to get to with the schizophrenia and psychosis manifesting, but I think this would work a lot better.