Hmmm… some good stuff there, although I think the expungement isn't necessary. It's pretty obvious that those things refer to human body parts, so it's not a case of the reader coming up with worse possibilities on their own. If you want to keep that part covered up I'd recommend writing it all out and then using blacked out characters to replace bits of text. DATA EXPUNGED is often used to imply that whole paragraphs or reams of information was removed while the black out just covers up a few words at a time.
Not sure how I feel about the golem pulling objects in spontaneously but I understand why it's relevant to the overall piece.
Thanks for the advice. This has a lot more expunged data than I'm usually comfortable with, but since I tend to treat SCP entries as narratives forced into report format, I was trying to use [DATA EXPUNGED] as a foreshadowing tool more than actual logical expungement would allow.
I'll see how it works with black boxes.
I'm hoping that the golem is more of a pitiable creature in the eyes of readers than a threat. It sure as hell doesn't *want* to be made of trash, let alone people parts. The only way to really keep that element is to make it totally involuntary. Its body does self-repair, and there's some severe discomfort if it can't. But it'd rather deal with that than [DATA EXPUNGE] somebody into a torso.