So made another SCP. It can be found here:
Comments & Criticisms are welcome.
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Okay… I like the idea of a guy that gets less recognizable the less he's recognized. A very nice self-sustaining spiral of awful.
The first interview needs a bit of spelling/grammar check and proof-reading, but I think it sums things up quite nicely.
Past that I'm very, very… Eh. Mostly because it seems like the researchers are trying to prevent him from getting worse, but everything after that first interview is agitating him into an even worse state. There's "testing the limits" and then there's "intentional sabotage."
Also: I might be wrong, but Class B amnesiacs are the big daddies for when you're rewriting major portions of memory, not short ones. And Class B AND psychotropic drugs!? There is LITERALLY no reason for the Foundation to keep this man constantly on edge and delusional beyond simple sadism, especially since he seemed quite interested in only worrying about keeping himself from fading out of existence when he first showed up.
I think it's actually normally Class A that are the big daddies, but it's one of those details that falls under "There is No Canon", so the actual letter is mostly only important for flavour purposes.
Edit: Now that I've read the article itself, though, yeah. I gotta say, those tests seem… well, douchebaggy on the researchers' parts, if you'll pardon my irreverence. I like the article pretty well up to that point, but it just seems… both unnecessary and meanspirited.
Piffy is an SCP Foundation Moderator, Lv. 9001 Squishy Wizard, and Knight of the Red Pen.
I might have overshoot on the sadism. Last time I made them to soft, so I made a conscious effort to adjust.
One variation of the idea I had was to make the effect contagious. Imagine a major city subjected to this. Hell, imagine being sent into something you know is a city, with people and… stuff, but you can't quite define anything, even when you are travelling trough it.
But I didn't want to overload on it, and there's only so many disaster level things you can have before another one becomes meh. Personal horror works better I think.
I also considered having him be pretty normal at the start, make friends with the guards, be an okay guy, then have a researcher make an unauthorized visit and have her get the same effect. An std non-existance plague seemed a bit cliche though.
I really though A was the worst. Like it went CBA and A is the big one. I'll see if I can find out.
I tried to set it up so it'd seem the Foundation was treating him well then hah! Twist, they're actually keeping him in a bad shape, for the good of reality(maybe). I guess the effect I actually got was that they treat him alright, then they don't.
Any ideas on how to up the horror for him?
Perhaps something rather horrible replaces him as he fades away? Might be rather cliche but it might make it creepier to find out something is using his condition to break into our reality…..
Considering that Adam Smith is actually a very famous person, you might want to choose a different person. The formatting, especially on the interview, needs some serious work. The description is also a tad short for my tastes though. Great idea though.
You can cut all the interview logs off this. They don't add anything except narm, and they distract from the main concept, which is really good. Get rid of those, change the guy's name, and you have an excellent SCP. The only things left are minor enough to be changed after you post—unbreakable plastic, minor lapses in tone, that kind of thing.
Looks cool, but you should really censor his name. That seems to be the tradition around here.
I've done some edits to it and I'd like it if someone could take a new look.
Changed name from Adam Smith to Rickard Smith(that's what I get for picking the most common first name and surname I could find)
Removed most of the interview logs. (Also removing all instances of his first name, ensuring the first change became kinda pointless)
Wrote out the description more, trying to condense what I put in the interviews into it.