Edit: Please don't post works in progress on the forums. Use the sandbox, which you can learn more about in the Guide to Newbies, over in the sidebar. -TroyL
1) Use sandbox
2) Your formatting and tone is…I don't even know what to say here. It's horribad.
3) YOU PUT THE "NAME" AFTER THE NUMBER. NEVER, EVER, EVER, EVER DO THAT. EVER. That "name" belongs on the main index page and nowhere else. WHERE is everyone getting the idea that this is a thing that is ever acceptable? IT ISN'T.
4) Not only did you do that, but you misspelled it when it's correctly spelled in the gorram thread title.
5) It doesn't do anything. So it eats stuff. Whoop-de-do.
Ok, I understand your concerns, but first understand that I have not posted this as a legit SCP yet because, as I said in the description, Gears is editing it for me. Second, I know the name goes in the index, this was just for idea clarity. Third, I'm not always considered good in the way of grammar. Fourth, I can be a little lazy sometimes, but I honestly have no excuse for misspelling the name of my own creation, and I know that. I do appreciate the feedback, regardless of the content, because I know it's the only way for me to be successful here…… and it doesn't just eat stuff, it has arms too!
Joking aside, I know I still have some work before this is acceptable by any means.
No problem with the tracing, but the description feels a little bloated but also kind of indistinct. Possibly chop it down a bit to give more clear details; eg. say "No eyes" rather than "a notable lack of eyes".
Also, possibly a bit too much detail on some things, such as Site 19 being specific, naming the submarine, and naming specific Foundation personnel involved.
Aside from that, it's a big hungry sea monster. Anything you could do to make it more interesting? Also, tighten up the spelling and grammar, people will be more likely to pay attention to you.
Like I said guys, Gears is doing the editing for this one, I just wanted to get feedback from my fellow members. Keep in mind that I have been here for not even a week, so I'm still working out how to do anything here. As for the specifics, mentioning site 19 was probably a little too much but the there is reasoning behind most of this, you just got to trust me. Dr. Raven and Dr. Light are pretty much the Foundation's resident biologists. I read their info, and they seemed like the smartest choices to use. But thank you to you guys and anyone else who gives me feedback in the future. As always, I appreciate any help from anyone.