Here is what I have, going to add interviews, but what do you all think in this "beta" state?
Right, let's get the nasty out first, shall we?
It almost like you can't decide on what your SCP gonna be. Is it something that cause electronics to go out or something giving terrible memory or is it predicting the future? there's no connection between them so your article came across as inconsistent and schizophrenic.
Also, "… levitate and pass through windows." Is it unable to use anything else as portal of exit/entry? Common sense dictates that if it can pass through solid glass pane used in window, it can probably pass through more porous object like brick wall.
Now on to the good bits:
… The picture's nice, I guess?
Okay, the basic idea of an ethereal hands that is interesting. But it need a major overhaul to make it interesting.
However, try to use proper paragraph structure (you clump everything into one, which can be an eye strain) . The basic layout should look like this:
Description: 1st Paragraph describes appearance
2nd paragraph describes effect/behavior/anomaly
3rd paragraph describes observation made (if you need to, expand to an experiment/interview log, but only if you're sure that they will add to the article)
Very rough draft, the "main" concept is that it causes people to have "memories" genocide (although they can be "future memories", and knocking out power is just a side effect of it's presence). I'm having trouble trying to describe it in a way that the Foundation would write it, I can explain the concept, I just have trouble doing so from a clinical, detached, and "beige" way.
Try looking up scientific papers (again, papers, not articles). That's where I develop my style from.
Not sure if that's a good idea. Most scientists can't actually write, and there's a fine but critical distinction between clinical and boring. Most papers fall on the wrong side of that, especially if you don't particularly know the material. Remember, these are executive summaries, not research papers.
Alright, I've been distracted (midterms) but I'm back. I'll get this updated into the format suggested. I don't know exactly how to word the whole concept of "receiving memories from both the past and the future." That's going to be something I will try and figure out, but any suggestions on that would be nice.