SCP-1046: Ana. Need Criticism
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Me and Creek finished our latest SCP, will appreciate any criticism or advice given here. Thanks!
SCP-1046: Ana. Need Criticism
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It's an interesting and novel idea, in my opinion.
However, contents of the letter ruins it. I mean, when an article includes the line 'If I cheat on you with Ronald McDonald', it loses all credibility as a serious article. My first and most important piece of advice would be to make an aggressive edit for anything that might harm the audience's ability to take it seriously.
It's also a little unclear as to whether the senders actually sent the letters. I think it works better if the majority of the senders actually never write the letters, and they just spontaneously appear when people make these sorts of pledges internally.
Well erm… the sad and scary thing is that everything in that letter was 100% legit. As in, it was an actual letter written by an anorexic. I'm not joking. Yeah, it's one of those situations where reality seems more fake than the fiction we create.
Hmm, now I'm wondering if I should edit a genuine anorexic's Letter to Ana to make it even more genuine.
Really? Wow. I feel kind of a stupid asshole now. If that's the case, I wouldn't edit it, just make it clear in some way that the letter is in fact genuine.
That's really, deeply troubling.
Don't feel that way, it's fine, I wouldn't have realized that either. Hmm, I'll have to think of a way to make it known as genuine. Maybe just remove the Ronald Mcdonald line. Hmm…
Nah, works better with real letters, in my opinion. Materialising internal pledges isn't really an interesting effect, besides everyone makes those at times.
The disturbing thing is people actually writing this sort of thing ,and it leaving you wonder whether it's the object causing such, as we know bloody little about it, or it's just them not being sane.
I find the letter to be distracting from the article, I feel most anorexic people are striving to become what they perceive as more beautiful, not sarcastically pointing out that they want to be unhealthy and kill themselves.
Minor point, Art-Nouveau is a style from the 19th and 20th Century. Use the term 'artistic style' or find a picture that you like and then you don't need to describe that aspect.
I like the concept of a SCP that gets worshipful fan mail.
Gah, I need to make a choice about this… On one hand, this is genuinely scary because the letter is entirely real… on the other hand, it reads to most people as very false.
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