Long story short, I posted an SCP last night, it got downvoted bad, probably because I royally botched the execution. I've got a second draft complete, and I'd like to get your thoughts on it:
Basic idea is good. Develop a bit on them experimenting on humans (maybe a researcher goes missing, is later found dissected in their enclosure), cut down a bit on the apocalyptic talk at the end.
They give me the impression of annoying monkey-gremlin things with a bit of a cargo-cult bent. Like, maybe after a while in the Foundation they'd start wearing mock lab coats and "questioning" each other.
They remind me of the watchmakers from 'A Mote in God's Eye' by Niven and Pournelle.
Many of the things I saw as a problem in the original are still present. Overall, it is too wordy and not clinical enough..
The containment procedures: Why are they more important than Dr Bigwig?
The rest of the procedures need a rewrite, and the instructions to the guards could be condensed.
The description needs work. The phrase; "enormous brain" is not what a scientist would say in a report.
The Admin needs enough info about the creature to recognize a photo of it, and to be able to justify the expenses of containing it.
Perhaps they could be described as idiot-savants.
I don't think the part about using them as research assistants is helping.
I really like the idea of them making their own lab coats, but I think many might disagree.