I'm a very new member, and I don't want to seem overly eager for attention, but I really do just enjoy writing and getting criticism. If this idea has been done before or to death, I would love to know. Thank you all in advance. I welcome the onslaught.
The idea is there, and I like it, but I feel that the execution was lacking. The "large amount of D-class personnel killed by use" part isn't really significant, because there are other, more dangerous SCPs out there. Furthermore, what about mental therapy?
Also, I think an experiment log would work quite well for this, giving us examples of the justifications given by subjects.
Finally, the picture looks too dramatic. just have a regular picture of a badge, or something else. You don't always need a picture although usually a picture helps.
This idea is cool, but your description is pretty bland. It needs more details, prhaps a recovery log. Also, you should probably add stuff under the [DATA EXPUNGED], since its covering the most interesting part of the article.
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I noticed the new image, and I'd say I quite like this one, especially because of the spiral.
However, the badge itself doesn't denote any rank nor does it name the police department. perhaps you should modify the description to fit this.
EDIT: Getting there. As of the last iteration I've noticed quite a bit of expungement. Why shouldn't we know the date of the wheat theft, for example? And how did the D class know the date in the first place?
For one, the picture has a watermark…? not sure if it was a placeholder, but yes, that is hairy on a fourth wall level.
I also think dialogue can go… far south, if not pitched right. I'd almost rather see an incident report, or something like that, for several individuals. Something that unfolds gradually, maybe. What you have here is a step, but it kinda rings a little Judge Dredd to me.
I'd keep the description as tight and simple as possible, and focus on developing some interesting supplementary stuff. The idea is meh and will stay that way without a really human hook.