Took the advice I received, and have altered some of the article. I will "fix" a great deal more of it after work. Please give some feedback. I specifically looked at the commentary on the subject.
Better. But it's backwards. The SCP is the virus. Its host is SCP 1059-1. They'd contain samples of the virus itself in a bio-hazard container, and probably retain the subject for study. Plus test its effects on rats (and maybe D-class if you're into that.)
I'd think SCP 1059-1 would be under stronger quarantine, more likely medical isolation. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Isolation_(health_care) Foundation precautions would probably include an airlock as well. She'll probably be terminated and autopsied for study the instant she becomes too much of a hassle, but right now she's the only advanced case they have to study. Why does she need no food? That violates conservation of energy.
Also, once she's in isolation, she'd only need the gas mask for vanity reasons… and wearing a gas mask 24-7 would not be comfortable.
I realize how uncomfortable it would be, but think about how much it must bug her. I'm attempting to push the reader into the belief that living with this condition for almost a century has taken a massive psychological toll on her.
And I actually have consistently considered flipping SCP-1059-1 and the woman. I don't know why I kept stopping myself; I'll take that suggestion, and put it into action.
1. The term is "retrovirus", not "genetic virus", if you do indeed mean a viral agent which alters the host's DNA.
2. You should probably make reference to the virus first, although it's fine to not explain it fully until the second section, as you could only explain the effects of the virus through a description of the subject.
"Subject is, in theory, considerably susceptible to explosive ordinance, however."
Adding the word "however" on to the end there is redundant, and it feels out of place. It's also redundant.
Apart from those minor errors, this feels a little akwardly worded in places, and I'm fairly sure I saw "SPC" in there somewhere Overall, it could do with a good read-over. The concept, on the other hand, is fairly good - especially the part about the girl's skin being torn off, an aspect which really needs to be emphasised.
Righto. I posted the original last night an most of the senior members panned it. So I plan on reworking it for a while.
I've written creatively before, but this place can certainly be brutal.
Thank you for the help though. Really appreciated guys.