I wrote an SCP and put it on the sandbox for now. However, after reading it multiple times, I still feel like something is missing from it and I can't figure it out what it is. Then again, it might just be my writing itself. If any of you would like to have a go at it, here's the link:
Thanks in advance for the help.
EDIT: The only reason it's not on the site proper yet is because I don't want get mobbed by downvotes before I'm ready.
EDIT 2: I just realized this should be in Help and Advice, not Writer's Block. If anyone can move it there so I don't have to have two posts of the same thing, that would be great.