I've been working on an SCP based on the legendary Goodtimes Virus. Any proofreading or critique will be very much appreciated. The draft can be found on http://sandbox.scp-wiki.net/agentbenjarsmin in the second collapsable. Again, thanks for any help that can be offered.
It seems okay, but how does a virus cause a nuclear reactor to rupture?
Also "personal computers, portable computers" are the same thing, it should just read computer.
Might be having a herp-a-derp moment here, but arn't nuclear reactors controlled by computers?
Also, I was trying to make a distinction between laptops and desktops. If that comes off as redundant, I will remove it.
But what do you think of it in general? Anything I should add/remove/edit?
Well laptops and desktops are the same thing in technical terms, just a different shape.
They are regulated so a computer virus could, in theory, cause a meltdown, but there are usually fail-safes in place.
Oh, and yes, it's good, could use a tad bit of refinement but it looks fine, might want to add in a detail that separates it from a nasty virus, maybe make it sapient.
1. Changed the laptop/desktop thing
2. Added an explination for the meltdown
3. Is this not explicit enough?
SCP-XXXX shows self-awareness
I think it's good, but I'm having trouble seeing how causing Chernobyl did not warrant being reclassified as Keter.
Good point! Will change immediately. But this cannot possibly be the only critique! Was there anything else? Do you like how it led up to the big breach? Did you think the hive-mind piece in the end was tacked on? Is it too powerfull? I'm still trying to get a feel for what is acceptable and what isn't, forgive me if I'm bombarding you with questions.
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The hive-mind seems like the logical conclusion for something like this.
I liked the build-up to the breach, it was well thought out.
It doesn't seem too powerful. You give control of all these things to machines, and if they decide to rebel, this is what would probably result.
I'm not sure about "graah mindless destroy all humans" being the way to go here. It's a bit cliched. It's fine for the individual units, but I'd like to see the hive mind have some kind of plan for humanity, or at least a good reason for hating us. Maybe it's sickened by the depravity of the Internet or something? Not sure, just my opinion.
Thanks for all the positive-ness!
I was trying to imply that this was created to destroy humanity. If computers can only ever get it from an email, then there must have been an original email that started it all. We don't know who made it, or why they made it, but we know they made it to destroy humanity, or at least try. And it's been (partially) succesfull, given that it controlled the entire state of California and blew up Chernobyl. Then agian, if that's not made clear, I might have to try aiming for something else :I