Right, I've trimmed the entry down a LOT, but I feel it might still be a touch on the long side so opinions on length are very welcome.
I think I was reasonably successful in eliminating a significant amount of technobabble, but again, if it's detracting from your enjoyment point it out and I'll fix it.
I changed the language basis to VHDL, which frankly makes more sense than C-like languages anyway. This might be a bit too nerdy for some, so I tucked it away in a collapsible test report. I've tried to keep the code as minimal as possible, but with enough clue to let people know what's going on.
I don't feel that the entry is creepy enough yet. I really need to spend more time on the creep, and suggestions are definitely welcome on this part. What would you find unnerving about such a device? For me, previously, it was the researcher trying again and again to make a working system and failing, but I took that out because it didn't quite feel like it fit in with the rest of the article.
Anyway, have at it please!