I thought about what scares me the most at the current moment, and I came up with something I think is very creepy, as least to young men. Its only a first draft, and it needs work and ideas, so I am posting it here to see what kind of brainstorming I can get for it:
Date: 23 Apr 2012 17:50
Number of posts: 8
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Fixed your format and a few issues.
It's okay, not really that great and seems kind of 'done'. Not to mention that it needs some serious work before this would even be page worthy.
First, please create a single sandbox page with your name as the title, not a new sandbox page for each of your SCP ideas. It's annoying to have the sandbox site cluttered up by so many pages.
Secondly… you missed the clinical Foundation tone by a mile, not to mention the horrendous spelling and grammatical mistakes. "sentinent"? "100s"?
"To human eyes, it appears SCP is a virus"? The Foundation is a virus? And it's visible to the naked eye?
Finally, this idea is just… boring. The interview log with the whole bit regarding "humanity is so primitive" isn't helping.
So it's Keanu Reeves from The Day The Earth Stood Still, except he's a hot girl who kills you with blowjobs?
This is bad, and not so bad it's good, and not bad like Michael Jackson's "Bad". I'd say either scrap it altogether or give it a serious reworking, because at the moment i'm seeing this less as terrifying and more as the setup for a bad Torchwood fanfic where Jack has to stop the monster with his magical future wang.
Thank you all for your help. I'm seriously rethinking the idea at the moment, and am thinking of ways to improve and modify it. I hope to improve this rather quickly or just change the idea around. Much appreciated.