My first SCP, The Ledger of Errancies was very poorly reviewed and deleted. No hard feelings, we've all been warned that our first one would likely fall flat. That being said, I want to find ways to make this more interesting.
Now, I want to focus on the grammar and wording second after fixing the core concept and outline. I want this to be something that maintains its roots in a dark administering of Catholic dogma, as my headcanon for this was it was an SCP deliberately made during the Spanish Inquisition. It should feel like a paranormal means of forcing people to "repent".
No, that in mind, what can I do to make this something fantastic?
- It's a portrait, not a book. Portrait appears as the SCP's current "owner".
- Instead of writing down sins, one of seven different marks is carved into the owner's flesh each time they sin. The carvings vary in size based on degree of sin. Once virtually entire flesh is covered in scars, internal organs begin to receive marks. This invariably leads to an agonizing death.
- Maybe adding more history to how the item came to be.
- Like the commendable and excellent Cannibal's Banquet, maybe adding diaries and records of this SCP being used properly?
- More/less testing logs?
- Would a picture help? If so, where could I find one?
Any and all advice being appreciated! While part of me wants to just make a whole new SCP, I kind of want to draw as much experience as I can from this mistake, learning exactly how to make a great entry.