This doesn't do much for me. But it's well-done, I imagine it will be other peoples' thing, and is pleasingly simple. A generous +1.
Date: 15 May 2012 15:36
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So… it's quicksand but only on vehicles? And sometimes stuff that goes in ends up in another place entirely? Not quite feeling the hook here. Also, you've got some formatting errors. Mostly line-breaks where there shouldn't be. You should clean those up. Also, the description pretty much hits us out of nowhere with that information on SCP-1973-1; that should really be lead into, and the importance of 'Jeannie' (which I assume is the only vehicle we've recovered from SCP-1973?) should be established in the description. Keeping my vote neutral for now; I wanna see what this looks like when it's polished.
By the way…
Then it struck me what was really odd. No sound. There were like a million vehicles here, all going along steadily and not one of them made so much as a squeak. We saw the crews, sat there, facing forwards, unmoving. I thought I'd gone mad, or died, or both. We'd just got moving, the engine wasn't on, wasn't in gear or anything, we were just moving along. Jesus, we spent so long on that road. I don't know how long we had been on it when something happened, but it more than I care to imagine. Then yeah, as suddenly as we got there, we were in the air, rising above the convoy. We kept on going through the white, then black, then out.
*scratches head* Maybe I'm just reading too much into things, but did you watch Porco Rosso right before writing this?
Porco Rosso? No I've never seen it, is it basically this?
There is a scene very similar to this in the film. It happens with military aircraft, rather than vehicles. But, yeah, the parallels are quite eerie.
Only way it could have been closer is if they came back as some sort of anthropomorphic animals.
ok this film sounds great! Dead(?) pilots come back as animals? wow, must check it out.
Nope, not that at all. It's a WW(not sure which) animated feature in which the pilot (Porco Rosso) has the face of a pig after a relatively unexplained event that happened to him, he spends his days in dogfights while pursuing lost love. It's pretty decent with great production values (Ghibli studios).
Like it (being a history buff) but I think it may be over-weighted toward the interview. Also there's no containment listed for SCP-1973-1 or the crew (which would probably get their own SCP designation).
Also, "No anomalous activity reported in or by SCP-1973-1 or crew." is directly contradicted by the body of the article. It should at least qualify it as "No anomalous activity has been reported in or by SCP-1973-1 or crew since recovery."
Containment should describe procedures for vehicles coming out of SCP-1973 (which I presume SCP-1973-1 was only the first).
Also, it might up the weird factor if the tank crew as displaced in time as well as space (instead of having the interview in 1973, which is kind of on-the-nose, maybe have it in the 80s or 90s, or have it in the late 60s, and the tank is from 1973)
Anyway, the interview is good, but the article around it could use some fixing up.
Sorted the random line break issue, revised containment procedures and description. Any criticism is still welcome
… I think I must've misread earlier. So these guys fell in a mudhold in Vietnam and came out in one of the lower 48 states? Huh… I'd say the hook needs a little more development before I commit to an upvote, personally. It's getting better, but it doesn't really grab me; at present all I'm seeing is vehicle-specific quicksand that one time spat out a tank that went missing in Vietnam. Does make me wonder what the other stuff that falls in goes to though…
The implication is that there are many such sites globally, but i'm unsure of how to get that across….
Downvoted. The article doesn't hook me at all, the basic premise is either esoteric or not fleshed out very well, and the interview log (which makes up almost all of the article's meat) has a giant chunk of text.
It's better than a lot of the articles we've had recently, and I can see that you're trying, but I just don't think this article works well for me.
Lots of issues in the writing, if not also the tone, but I didn't downvote until I saw the untraceability of it. How can they even know about it if they can't find it? Doesn't it say where the field is located in the description?
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This article wavered for me. I wasn't hot on the description, but the interview was neat enough to neutral vote, and then the last note made me sigh and downvote. If more could be done with the imagery on display here, I would be happy. Maybe an additional couple of paragraphs in the description or summat.
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