http://sandbox.scp-wiki.net/the-egyptian-mau Here it is, now in the right place.
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Rough drafts should posted on the sandbox and then linked here.
Boa, dude, Let the Senior Staff handle it. Posting [Not a mod] does not make it any less backseat modding.
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I got excited when I saw that you posted in my thread. Then incredibly depressed when it wasn't feedback. Haha. 2 am does strange things to the mind.
Keep in mind you aren't supposed to make a new sandbox page for each SCP, just one with your name on it.
Also, this SCP does nothing for me, the tone is WAY off.
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I kind of like the idea of a SCP which demands human sacrifice…. ….and gets it, but we have to many cats. Maybe make it more of a monster all the time?
So is the "monster" form enough of a monster or still too much of a cat?
Would it work if I cut the docile form and said the creature resembled a cat? I wanted to tie it in vaguely to Egyptian cat worship without bluntly calling it out.
How about a biologic creature resembling a sphinx then?
The tone is horribly off. "biological creature resembling a cat"? No thanks.
"SCP-XXX is a creature resembling …" is what you want to be using.
Other than that… this is hella boring. It's an invincible cat-god. Umm, yay?
Okay, I have read this a lot now and I agree. Something is missing with the concept.
It can't be that bad though, can it? It took an elderly cat lady and turned her into a serial killer. And the notes at the end make my dark humor bone smile. There has to be something which can salvage this idea.
Do I scrap this, or does someone have a good proposal?
At the moment it's a bit too much "Things what we should do what they say becuz we wouldn't like them when they're angry." from the big list of cliches.
I think you could do something amusing with the idea of how cats are treated like gods by their owners, but maybe you should go full on -J for that.