The problems with this are structural, not conceptual. People have told you this is a bad idea, but I think they're wrong, and that — in your haste to strictly obey the SCP format — you've buried the lede to this article. Here's what I'd do:
Establish that this is a serious cognitohazard in the containment procedures. Having done so, you can pull up the interesting part (winged, grammatical fascist demigod) up into the second paragraph, while discussing the interesting parts of the language (weird tenses, extra genders, cognitohazard) into the first paragraph. Some of the spare weirdness, particularly the 'weird' future tense (which isn't actually weird at all, to a linguist) need to be cut to make room for the weirder parts, like the 'xenophobic' tense. Perhaps some of that needs to be expanded, though I somewhat doubt it.
In other words, I think you've mastered the form, but are still having some problems with deploying it in support of your story. If you have any questions, feel free to PM me.