This is my newest SCP. Any and all feedback is welcome, I will be making changes accordingly.
It seems kind of bland to me… maybe add something about a subject being physically restrained from killing themselves, and how they get madder and say more mysterious things or something… just an idea
I will take it into account. May add that and then add an interview on, but we shall see.
Here is a thought. have them all kill themselves with some kind of wound (and typically a stab wound) to the back of the skull. The same place pictured by the king on the card.
Does it only affect poker games? Would it have a similar suicidal effect while playing snap, or bridge, or solitaire? What if it were used in a magic trick?
What this left me wondering is, are there any other cards to this deck? do they have different effects? And lastly, will SCP-500 cure this suicidal tendency?
For some reason, I could picture a Joker or something might have some beneficial effect like guaranteeing success, but might induce a personality change in the person affected by it afterward. Possibly makes them incapable of feeling emotion other than near-psychotic glee at all times. This wouldn't necessarily be dangerous, just rather creepy/annoying, especially if the person affected doesn't see anything wrong with the fact that nothing ever makes him unhappy.
I love the setup (the card, its appearance and the way it disguises itself), but the effect is far too predictable.
Well that is the thing about the suicide king. I think that I may have another way for people to die. I was thinking that each person (later on in the day) died in some way, with an object being impaled through their skull from the side, just like the sword on the card.
That would be kinda freaky
One small note though, he is being stabbed through the back of his head not the side.
Okay, made some changes and such. More feedback is much appreciated!
Just remember: it's "Foundation's" not "foundations". I see people downvoting because of this all the time. One other thing- "Box should be comprised of steel to protect against any external damage"- this is unnecessary. Just write "a steel lockbox".
ooo, this is getting pretty creepy and concise. I like it.
Pretty good as is, I wonder though if there is something more that could be added…
I was thinking about test logs with different card games, but that seems useless. If anyone has suggestions I would be willing to hear them!
I personally think that its just a little to simple…..Maybe you could add just a little bit of……sparkle to it. I'm thinking, and this is just my opinion, add some side affects into the mix that are different for each person that sees and uses the card. Also, (and this is just my opinion) If there are deaths involved, I would either label it as Euclid or Safe/Euclid again, this is just my opinion. But anyways, this is a GREAT start! :)
Kind of incomplete as it currently stands.
Wasn't this posted yesterday?
Okay, here it is, reinvented a little bit. The third paragraph is a bit wordy, I plan on fleshing it out soon. But as the general idea, better?