Doesn't need the Bright note at the top by any means, but otherwise I like it.
Date: 07 Jun 2012 14:45
Number of posts: 14
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It seems like something that I would believe he would do D:
Still. It breaks the tone of the piece, and it qualifies as "lolfoundation", which people are tired of. Maybe add it to the List of Things Bright is Not etc., though.
If enough people bitch about, it'll go away.
Yeah, it definitely breaks the tone.
Giving bearhugs to the unsuspecting since 1872.
It's a great idea, "scp-eople" who are otherwise just regular folk is pretty existentially creepy; and I really like the toss-off guard. There might be enough meat in that idea to make a good item. You'd have to find the right spin on his psychology and world-view to make it truly interesting, but it could be done and done well.
But something about this just leaves me flat. Maybe it's too short to really cement the mood in my mind? Sorry I can't pin it down, but I'm left with just a lot of meh. Which is too bad, because I want to like it.