After my mostly harmless SCP's, I've decided to try something different. This is partly based on several old folk tales.
Any advice would be appreciated.
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I like it. Is it inspired by any real-world folklore? It has a real folklore-ish feel to it.
It is, mostly on the tale of the the soldier who captured Death in a magic sack, and Death became so afraid of him he could never die. I believe it's Russian in origin.
Now that I've thought about it for a bit, a critique: as the article stands, I think he could be contained. Find some place in the middle of nowhere, the Foundation has it made into a wild-life preserve, and the Foundation tells him to stay there. Establish a base 30 miles away. Every day, have someone in an all-terrain vehicle drive the 30 miles to his spot, drop off some perishable food in paper/cardboard containers, some firewood, and a few matches, then drive back to base. He eats the food, then burns the containers and matches in the fire.
Now, if he had a compulsion to not stay in one place, and could only be kept still by locking him up, then the above method wouldn't work.
And a joking theory on how to kill him: take him to SCP-349 and wait for the entity who created it to do him in. Or, alternatively, wait for SCP-349 to be destroyed, then wait for the entity who created it to go after the old man for vengeance.
Adding a compulsion might be a good idea. I might as well add he doesn't need to eat or drink, being deathless and all.
could also make the effect range expand if he tries to avoid people. It's apparently a set of malevolent entities that plague him, I imagine they'd be pissed if he tried to cheat them (again presumably).
Having read and looking at the changes you've presumably made in adding the compulsive seeking of the third brother, I really like this. It's simple but power, eerie without being creepy, because you genuinely feel bad for the guy. The ending log is a bit hammy, but it works. I'm a sucker for a good one-word warning.
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There's something really ominous here and I like it.
I like it, the only thing that I would massage a little bit is this phrase "SCP-XXX is compulsed to travel in a particular, highly complex pattern"
Not sure what it is about it that bugs me but it doesn't quite seem to match what you're trying to describe. Maybe trying something along the lines of "SCP-XXX travels in a manner that suggests a pattern, the exact nature of which is still under analysis in attempts to predict his movement."
Anyway, it's a minor thing, I think it's a good article.
While I agree with you that the wording is a bit awkward, the fact that he's had multiple interactions with the foundation suggests that they know he moves under a compulsion- he almost tells the interviewer exactly that when says "I have spent time untold searching for [The Third Brother]," so I don't really think it's a matter of inaccuracy, just of poor wording. Maybe something more like "SCP-XXX has attributed its movements to a compulsion symptomatic of its condition, but is either unwilling or unable to divulge information regarding its path in the future"? Not the best, I know, but whatever.
Edit: Utterly beaten. Oops!