This one is my first. I have the basic plot— if you want to call it that— laid out. I still need to flesh out the last 2 sections and do lots of polishing. But I'd appreciate it if anyone could give me some advice, whether this is something worth pursuing, and if so, what changes I should make. Thanks!
(Please pardon my newb-isms— I am indeed a newbie, and despite my best efforts, I'll still be one)