Hello! You may remember SCP-1292, the tooth industry? It…didn't go well. Anyway, it seemed the main problem people had was with the cloud monster, so I have done a re-write removing it and changing some other things. Is this any better, or should I just give up on the concept altogether?
You probably should avoid bumping unless you have made changes to the document.
If no one is responding its likely because no one finds it interesting enough to give feedback which is feedback in itself.
I didn't see the original article, but I suspect although the "cloud monster" might have been a big problem, the entire article was unliked.
You have some interesting concepts. I think the idea of something taking and using teeth to build various contraptions is a pretty interesting idea, but this article seems to be a bunch of unrelated and unreasonable aspects jumbled together. It just isn't a coherent idea as is. Mainly the vastness of this underground facility and the complexity and variety of its inhabitants supposedly made out of teeth doesn't really make sense.
I think you should go back to considering the origin of the idea. Why did this come to exist? What is its ultimate purpose? Exploring the back story might help you make this more reasonable and coherent. Also tone it down. It doesn't have to be vast and powerful and complicated and intricate in order to be successful.
Ah, sorry, won't do that again.
Well, I'll just lurk more and try to come up with more ideas.