I really like this one…. but then I have tastes from beyond Jupiter. You've got my upvote, in any case.
Date: 04 Jul 2012 03:21
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It's…it's like that diary from Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets.
I started to say just that….
We had something like this a while back, it even knew how to kill 682. This on the other hand is bland, boring, and unoriginal.
- Bad expungement
- Bad tone
- Boring idea
I really don't know what else to say about this one. One big thing that perseveres throughout the article is the bad expungement. Your goal as a writer of an SCP is to expunge as little as absolutely possible.
(With the exception of ████████████ ██ █████)
and SCP-1195 will [DATA EXPUNGED] often fatal
Why are these here? What do they do? Case and point.
The object also gets very Mary Sue-ish: it has a personality with artistic preferences, it can talk, it can move, it can blow people up, and it can't be destroyed it's regenerative. And it has the death sentence in the Containment Procedures:
Due to the generally amicable disposition of SCP-1195…
Noting that the object has been friendly to the Foundation, especially when that personality trait makes us give it stuff, is usually a tonal death sentence for an SCP. And it makes me not like it.
And not to be one of "those" people, but this is also very long for the small amount of relevant information in the article. It feels like it diverges from scientific research into All About My Anime Character and The Cool Powers It has.
Structural stuff aside, this would be better if you focused less on the object as an entity and more on the object as an object.
but upon being responded to in any other language, it will continue to interact with the spoken/written one instead
I kind of want to respond in 1337 $P33K.
SCP-1195 appears to be sentient. It does not identify itself by any name or designation (Including SCP-1195) but appears to have a friendly, encouraging personality which enjoys "reading" new literature.
I don't believe that's sentient, but instead sapient which is kinds a one-up of sentience.
invariably results in [DATA EXPUNGED] up to ███°C, causing rapid air expansion which generates an outward force of roughly ███ Newtons
Jesus fuck what. Poor expungement, silly 'don't piss it off or else' effect.
Any stub left in the book is "pulled in", and SCP-1195 will [DATA EXPUNGED] often fatal.
Rather silly expungements here and there. You should address them and ask if you really need the expungement there.
ntil further notice, no experimentation is to take place regarding SCP-1195's interaction with other literary-themed SCPs, especially SCP-423 and SCP-826. The dangers inherent in introducing a sentient intelligence to another SCP must be approached with due caution.
We don't need this note, since excessive cross-testing is rather silly. AFAIK, we don't even do that shit anymore excepting a few, well, exceptions.
Overall, I'm with Hyaenaboy. You try to give the book too much of a personality, losing any particular interesting things you may have had from bad tone, mostly from how much description you give personificating a book. Whatever interesting things may be there are poorly expunged. If you want to improve, I'd suggest turning it around right to its core, and expounding from there. What do you want to do with the concept? Creep us out? Intrigue us? What about it is the thing that's supposed to 'get' us?
Living the dream, or dreaming the life?
I like it. A lot. But I'm in a minority. I'd focus on the book's personality. It's a book from the middle ages. It likes to tell people stories of heroic knights and damsels in distress. It likes to be told those stories too. You've done that but maybe bring it out more for other people to get.
I'm pretty certain no leather bound books like the one showed in the picture were made until centuries after the year 0. The book looks far too new to be as ancient as you say it is (a few hundred years, if that). Small things like that can ruin the willing suspension of disbelief.
SCP-1195 is a leather-bound book (approx. 25cm x 17cm) of indeterminate but unquestionably ancient origin
You cannot question the ancient-ness of this object.
I'm a historian, questioning is what I do! God dammit, if I took the time to date every single one of my SCPs at least somewhat correctly (as in, the same century), the least the author of this can do is date it to the proper millennium.