OK. So this here is my new project. I would like some constructive feedback as to how I can improve it before I send it the the main site. Thank you in advance.
Well, I'll be honest. This is SCP-025 except hammy and rid of anything that makes me like the original.
Due to the very expendable nature of the muffins, and there being a single packet, I can't see a plausible way this'd have been recovered, either.
However, all subjects that have consumed any amount of SCP-1173 have experienced extremely gory and painful deaths, resulting from a direct attack by an entity that fits the appearance of the figure on the label.
How the hell do we know how the entity looked ,even?
As a last point, your D-class would definitely not look healthy. Lemme translate into imperial - first guy is 6'4' and weighs 120lbs, while the second girl is 5'9 and weighs 105lbs. That's concentration camp condition, not health.
we know what it looked like from the highly classified picture taken from 6784-D's security camera. But thanks for your input anyway.
I see now.
However, I fail to see why would it be classified at all , much less highly (seriously, can you ever see that sort of underlining being used in an official document?)
A picture of the grim reaper is not exactly what the foundation would want researchers emailing to there buddies. But yes, underlining was somewhat unnecessary
Um… no. This is a report on the SCP in question, and unless the picture itself has anomalous properties, there's no reason why it would be classified. Never mind that there's zero reason to assume it is grim reaper, or any such exists - it's simply an entity that looks like the folk depiction.
This just screams of "author being lazy to find a good pic"
Never mind that having GR involved is cheesy as hell.
well what do you suggest that I do?
Like I said, most importantly is to steer this away from being a poor SCP-025 replica.
Like you said? earlier you said SCP-025. I also don't see many resemblances between this and those. Other than use of it can result in injury.
Sorry, mistook number. I meant SCP-025, and fucked up when linking as I was doing something else.
The point stands.
Also what do you think of the picture. Is it too cheesy?
Not exactly packaging.
yeah. It's the best I could do with google images and Paint. Not sure what else I could put there. Every picture of a chocolate chip muffin I find looks cutesy or sweet. Not the image I want the portray the the reader.
Every SCP-1173 is a set of twelve (12) chocolate chip muffins
this is evidence enough to suggest that there is more than one packet.
Test log: SCP-1173-b-2
also this. SCP-1173-(letter indicating packet)-(number indicating muffin from said pack).
I'll admit that one was a bit hard to realize.
That's a bad formulation. How many of the packets have we contained? One'd think that inventarisation is the least we can do there.
Eech - I missed that as well. I'm 6'4 and weigh TWO hundred and twenty pounds, I dread to think what that poor sod looks like.
I have some ideas:
-D-class that consume these muffins occasionally report mild feelings of guilt (or just an impression that they weren't supposed to eat these muffins) and/or report feeling watched or stalked some time afterward.
-Deaths aren't just random lacerations inflicted by unseen assailant: all causes of death are plausible and apparently non-anomalous, but the circumstances behind them all seem highly improbable, e.g. subject with family history of heart disease may die of heart attack despite being perfectly healthy beforehand, or someone trips and just happens to crack their head open on a conveniently placed hard object.
-Most deaths (or rather, visits) occur when the subject is alone or not being watched, but recording devices will catch hints of another presence, e.g. security footage catches glimpses of an additional shadow being cast with no apparent source, and audio recorders might pick up some background noise resembling garbled speech, most is incoherent though the words "those were mine" may be deciphered.