Is the title for the page OK?
I was worried it would be too long……..
Date: 06 Jul 2012 14:50
Number of posts: 19
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The title is fine. Also, I like this.
Now you need to announce it in the appropriate announcements thread, and link it from the Foundation Tales page.
Yay, new featured articles!
I like this. It's a little slow, but being as it is in the form of a newpaper report it works great, and although I'm not too familiar with the CotBG I still like this. Not my favorite, but enjoyable enough.
I didn't really find this one interesting. It's teenagers burning cars because of something they read online. Ho-hum. I like some kind of emotional impact or connection in my tales, and I didn't get anything from this.
I'm 200% sure I was not going for emotional impact when I wrote this 2 years ago, I was going more for the realism part.
Not everything in life is supposed to make your feels flutter out the window, and that's what I tried to do. It has a simple story and a super neutral journalistic delivery because that's what I thought the Foundationverse needed. Boring local tabloid news.
I can't stand the CotBG canon, and because of that, I missed this. I really enjoyed the alternate take on things. You've stripped the canon of its self-importance and heavy-handedness and placed it into an "everyday life" context where it appears ridiculous—just like teenagers convinced they're the most original and important people that ever there were. :) +1.
I love it.
The one thing I'm not concerned with is the title. I'd say remove "CotBG" from it. I wasn't aware of it for the first time, so when I read the whole thing I was like "this doesn't make any sense". When I read "Church of the Broken God", my jaw dropped just like SCP-096, and I screamed "ooooooooooooohhhhh" in my mind. It made the tale 10 times better for me. Then I realized it was written in the title, and if I knew what it was about, I'd just "meh". Just put "Recovered document 4761" and it's good.
In my opinion, a twist makes things way more interesting than they are. That's just me, tho.