First off, the procedure and requirements should be in a paragraph, not in a bulleted list. If it was, it would improve the flow of the article to be more catching. I would shuffle some of those things into the "standard equipment" for MTF-1731, which isn't fully listed, just to de-clutter the article. Murderously complex and detailed does not necessarily mean good. Compare your procedures to Procedure 110 Montauk. Absolutely nothing is known about Montauk, which gives it the mystery it needs to be entertaining and vaguely creepy, while allowing the reader to fill in the black boxes. Yours are fully explained, which not only removes any mystery of the substance, but it is also a brick wall of text that makes it daunting and confusing to read. I think the background section should be molded into the description, and shrink the procedure list from three to one. Also, it needs some other tone and language edits to get it into proper format. Also, a drayman's hatch must be a British thing, because I had to Google it. Felt like a moron.
There is definitely a lot of potential in it, but it needs some work.