I really like this, and I love it knowing that it's the first in a series. So many great lines, and entertaining setup. I like the take on the Factory as well.
Date: 31 Jul 2012 08:34
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I very much enjoyed this. It's always good to see Nobody in a tale, and now that he finally has a tag maybe we'll see more of him. Of course, I'm sure your plans for him are very different (and probably better) than my own, but I'm still quite looking forward to seeing more.
This is awesome. You are awesome. I love stories that manage to connect several GOIs together, especially when they do it in an interesting way. This story succeeds wildly in that regard. The pacing was excellent, and I was constantly wanting to read farther to find out what happened next. You made the factory really creepy without playing it up too much, it was nice and subtle but entirely unnerving.
If there is more to this story I cannot wait to see it.
Very well done.
I wonder, since this is the Heart, and the Foundation has the Brain and Muscles, whether 914 is the Liver? It does break things down and makes new things from old.
I never thought of it that way… I really do like the idea of 914 as the Liver.