Here. I'm posting to the sandbox for feedback, rather than embarrassing myself on the main site. Again.
[Would it be helpful to to put a note in the guides about sandboxing? At the moment, it just gives instructions on posting to the main site, which is apparently a bad idea for us new writers.] [Also, minor thing: the subtitle of this forum should say 'ideas', not 'idea's'.]
So… thoughts? Bad bits? Good bits, if any?
The main criticism of my last SCP was that it was boring. Oh, and, I think also that it was a bit shit. Yeah, those things mainly. If I can avoid that this time, I'll be happy.
Edit: Changed the link to point to my google docs copy, easier that way.