I thought I'd try my hand at an SCP-J, and I'd appreciate some feedback before I blindly post it to the main page: http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/shadowox8
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It made me laugh.
… this really isn't that funny. Just as a friendly hint, it's almost never a good idea to try to write a humanoid or joke SCP as your first attempt, as they tend to end badly. The people who manage to do so are the exception, not the rule.
… this really isn't that funny.
But you did think it was a little funny? (That's how I read your comment.) Do you find the idea to be intrinsically lackluster, or simply my execution?
In any case, I'll keep your hint in mind (although I do consider myself to be quite exceptional, if I may say so).
This is not very well written. I'd give you some advice here on how to improve it, but honestly it seems you just need more experience writing. I'd shelf this idea for now, and then do a complete re-write of it once you have more experience writing SCPs.
Well, thanks for the honesty. Although I'm a little confused on one point: Is my writing in general bad (i.e. difficult to understand, poor word choice, etc.), or is my tone/style not correct for a (joke) SCP?
I ask because I have had experience writing—enough to feel confident—so to hear you say…
I'd give you some advice here on how to improve it, but honestly it seems you just need more experience writing.
…is a little disheartening.
I like it. It's a self-applied SCP, which is a gimmick that's been used before, but it still made me chuckle, and while it's short for an SCP, it probably should be: There's not much there, so padding it out would just be wasteful.
The last line was the one that really got me.
Joke SCPs are supposed to be funny.
This one is not funny.
I'd do what Salman suggested. Get some more experience first, and come back to it. Joke SCPs are really, really hard to pull off, and doing it as your first SCP is a bad idea.