Seems kind of contrived so as to be an inconvenience to the Foundation, but I guess a reader can roll with it if the rest of the narrative feels more genuine.
Honestly, the whole "immunity to amnestics" idea came later, I was originally just trying to convey that this guy seemed to be completely invincible, not just to physical attacks. But I can see how it seems like a plot convenience.
the Foundation definitely wouldn't have let the interview with the mother happen, or would have let the mother stay so the dude doesn't completely break down.
You're probably right on this front. I've changed that part accordingly. The interviews were a little too on-the-nose anyway, upon re-reading.
I didn't pick up on that at all.
I was hoping that the revelation of the "three-year delay to injury" would lead people to realize that because one of the tests involved him being shot in the head, he was effectively doomed. The latter half of the article is meant to be the skip coming to terms with his impending death, not him spiraling into depression and killing himself out of nowhere.
Seems like that didn't get conveyed well either, so more editing is required ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
I really dislike reading logs/repetitive stats dumps that could effectively be summarized by small, straightforward paragraphs of in-description text.
I get this comment a lot, and I think it's because I'm one of those people who greatly enjoys reading test logs, so I end up sticking them in my writing. However, I don't want them to drag the entire article down just for my own niche interest, so I've removed the test logs entirely. Hopefully this new version is a bit easier to read through, and gets the story across more smoothly.
I'll stop bumping this thread now, but thanks again for all the help!