Hey, I've made some changes since last post into (what I hope will be) the last edition. Also, how do I shrink my incident reports down to a tab that can expand? I feel it looks too long and imposing without the tab. Thanks!
There is the link to it. I know it's not on the SCP website =) One time thing!
Pretty okay by my standards, but why was the airlock not completely remote-controlled? That would have prevented the object from breaking containment and escaping into the facility, as well as prevented the loss of that D-Class.
Without going too far into specifics, among other things, the special containment procedures seemed a little nutty. If nothing else, so far as I can tell, there are no airlocks between the chambers (which you sort of need if one of them is a vacuum). You also might want to specify what "extremely low bariometric [sic] level" means (because this could be a vacuum, too). The incident report is also pretty…extravagant. That seems like a huge indoor area, and not particularly smart on the Foundation's part.
You should probably get a second opinion, but I don't think this is ready for posting yet.
Can't point out line by line issues because phone. In general, lots of tone issues like "stumbled" and "hunts down". Reread the with with an eye for connotations in your wording. Chances are if connotations are particularly strong you may be breaking tone.
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