He is a corpse that has no organs his legs and left arm has been chopped off and he claims to not have a soul yet he is still alive tecnically and can float around useing his powers. And has what appears to be black blood but it is literary nothing however if you touch it you become corrupted and start to be like him minus the powers of controlling the spaces between matter. Also he claims to have a daughter and has stated she is far more powerful then himself.
This sounds more like anime villain material than SCP material.
i was watching soul eater when i came up with the idea so yeah
or was it hellsing
and i just got into the zalgo mythos
IAIRAI, if you find you have more to say on a topic after making a post, please edit your post instead of making a new post. Just click "Options", and then "Edit".
Protip: If you get an SCP idea from an anime, there's virtually no chance it's going to work. My apologies, but from what I'm reading I don't believe this idea has any potential in the slightest.
well its supposed to be based off of zalgo
Zalgo is a bad base for an SCP. It's an internet meme based on the Lovecraftian horror archetype. I'm sorry, but Cthulu-esque abominations are pretty uninteresting around these parts.
In fact, Zalgo was used in a tale explaining why we don't receive such monsters well. I'd suggest you read it.
and which tale
What are you implying? Either way, it's at a low score and the posts in the discussion are less than favorable. What are you trying to prove?
I'll amend what I said. It's not literally impossible for an SCP based on something from a manga/anime to work, but this site and most manga/anime have vastly different tones and aim to elicit different emotional responses. Just because it works in one type of fiction doesn't mean it does in another. Thus translating ideas from manga/anime to this site isn't an oft ventured effort, and when it is ventured the results are usually of poor quality.
experimentation is what im all about and this is said experiment
You can experiment with ideas and writing to a limited degree, but keep in mind that when an article is posted on the main list, it's expected to be a fully thought out, finished product. If you were thinking of posting this as is and then doing major alterations to it from feedback, don't do that.
why do you think i posted it here and yes i am planing on putting limiters on him like maybe he is hurt when exposed to light or his powers are limited to a certain area like scp 239 ect. this think of this as the alpha version
and it is a barley there idea and it isint even in article form and im pretty sur there are a few scp that were based on anime (which this is not) that were successful
You said you were watching Soul Eater/Hellsing when you thought this up. I figured you were implying that one of those programs inspired this idea.
I do know of one article that was inspired by an anime/manga that's decent, so I'll give you that. However, the idea itself was thought provoking and different. This is just a generic humanoid abomination.
You posted this wanting feedback, and I gave you feedback. Don't get all defensive and start going "well this is just a bare concept I haven't even written it up" just because I don't like it and point out why.
Um… what anime were the teleporting fish inspired by?
Mackenzie said they were inspired by something from Mushishi. Googling it turned out nothing, so maybe I'm just not familiar enough with whatever she was talking about. *shrugs*
sorry. okay i just get defensive about my thoughts it has alot to do with my personal life
You gotta have a thick skin here. I know it's disappointing to have your idea criticized like this, but people around here accept that not all their ideas are golden, and know full well that their ideas will get shot down on occasion. This site isn't about supporting each other's egos with unearned praise. It's about producing quality writing.
I know I sound like a real stick in the mud, but it really is enjoyable once you get into the groove of things.
Edit: Why the hell did I word it like that?
i know, i actually joined this site to brush up on my story writing skills.
My advice is don't write this until you've read more of the site and have done some writing that more fits the site. You can write what you want, but you're going to have to find a more interesting take on this idea, and write the hell out of it for it to work. Don't do it as your first SCP. If you still have this idea stuck in your head after writing a few more mainstream articles, and you want to give yourself a challenge, then go for it…
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I imagine this would work to a limited sense if it was just some sentient living hollow shell made of what seems like flesh, but all the bits about its powers, status, and daughter would just be delusional ravings with no evidence to support them.
Maybe the "blood" just makes people that touch it become convinced that this guy's delusions are real?
No. This is not a good idea. Maybe in some other universe, but only with a whole hell of a lot of talent backing it up.
I'm going to be completely honest: the fact that you don't seem to be able of typing a coherent sentence isn't going to get many people to take you seriously, especially around here. However, if you want tutoring in grammar and how to write SCPs, just send me a PM. I am here to help.
The issue I see is that you are starting from a powerset without any narrative hook or conception of how this would fit tonally with the rest of the SCP collection. Aside from him being powerful because he has powers there is really not much nuance or intrigue to it. It's essentially a captured super villain with an even more powerful daughter running around. While alarming in real life there is nothing unsettling or inspired there. Mind, I've been a member for about twenty minutes so take it with a grain of salt.
that's why i posted it here for help consider this the alpha version
Ok. So this applies more to my experience with long form prose but it might be helpful to you. When you are creating a character, and the SCP's are essentialy characters, it's important that you have a sense of their place in the story before you begin rigidly assigning their attributes. When you start with "huge sword guy with sword that can cut through anything" there is no connection with the broader narrative and no sense of his purpose in the story. Figure out who they are and in what way do they comment on the broader themes in play.
Even when dealing with a high concept object or force you still want to consider "why is this upsetting/inspiring/affecting" to the established context beyond their general capacity for mayhem.