This is Part V of Conspiracy. It is not so much a horror story as an intrigue thriller. I have studied intelligence and espionage fairly extensively throughout university, writing my senior thesis on intelligence analysis. This tale is essentially an attempt to write up a good spy story in the world of the SCP Foundation.
Date: 13 Aug 2012 18:15
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So, this is a silly thing to be bothered by, but the reference to the binomial theorem here bothers me. I realize we have the missing number and all, but really this reads to me like "he performed research on multiplication, particlarly mulitplication of interest to the Foundation…"
It's a minor thing though. I'd say in general this is a really solid story you've got here.
It's both a shout-out and a throw-away line. Maybe someday I'll get around to writing an SCP that explains why such a simple mathematical concept would warrant what is implied to be significant scholarly attention by both the Foundation and others.
A minor complaint: is writing parenthesis in a quotation correct? Even if it is, it looks very strange.
It is correct.
As far as looking strange, there are a number of roughly equally correct ways of separating clauses in complex sentences, such as commas, parentheses, and hyphens. There are some highly technical grammatical reasons to use one over the other (stuff people generally never learn and ignore if they do), making it an author's choice thing. I generally favor parentheses when possible, because my writing style tends to have lots of long, complex sentences with a great many subordinate clauses (thereby requiring commas).