Hey, author, looks like your formatting is off. You can find a template for your formatting in this guide.
Also, is this what you mean by an addendum box? This is a blockquote.
So, upon reading, I find tons of spelling and grammatical errors in this draft. You can fix those easily by putting this into Word or Google Docs, and spellchecking/grammar checking it. That should clean it up.
Admittedly, I'm not quite sure what you're going for in this article. You keep saying that this television is of unknown origin and then mentioning that it's from a GoI…the ideas you present, overall, seem to be thrown into one article but not connected in any way. It's quite difficult to understand the article as a result of this, so I'm going to suggest you visit the Ideas and Brainstorming forums in order to hammer out the dents in this idea.
Good luck!
