I would like comments and criticism on this, please. Imagine I posted it on the main site, and rip into it as one would in the discussion page.
Why a bulletproof lock-box? Also, the tone here seems to me to be non-clinical:
If there is a breach involving SCP-1750 and contact is made secure the item but DO NOT attempt to use it.
It could probably be replaced by something sounding more like a formal order than a part of conversation.
Security reasons; it's an item that could potentially bring down the Foundation (by showing someone the locations of every SCP, of the Directors, of every location, etc.) thus with a bulletproof lock-box any successful attempt at stealing it will be hindered long enough that the nearest task force can get crazy on the perpetrator before they can use it. Also why it changes between lock-boxes once a week, so no-one (other than the Ethics Committee) really knows where it is. Though I should probably add a form of tracking device to it.
And yeah, that is a pretty bad line, you're right. I think I'm going to have to change the e-mails as well; I now see that it's much more likely that they'd put up formally written notices in the addenda rather than copy-pasting private correspondence. Do you think it works in the Journal Logs though?
Thanks a lot for the feedback.